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Erup41
Posts : 23 Join date : 2013-07-16
| Subject: Kataro Hattori (Sorushi the seven tailed griffin) Fri Jul 19, 2013 2:38 pm | |
| Name: Kataro Uchiha Gender: Male Age: 10 Height: 4,5 Weight: 80lbs Hair: White, short and undone Eyes: blue Birthday: 3/28/?? Clan: Uchiha Sexuality: Straight Village: Village hidden in the clouds Rank: Genin Element(s): Lightning and Fire Specialties: Evaluation and Awareness General Appearance: Personality: He's smart and kind. Living and eager to meet new people. Likes: Sitting on rooftops Dislikes: Small children (even though he is a child) Motivations: To become the strongest in his village Fears: To die in battle History: Have you read the rules: I don't remember the code soooo. I'll just say yes. Justsu/abilities: (Fire style, fireball jutsu) (Bolt spitter) He shoots a lightning bolt out of his mouth. (Substitution jutsu) (Shadow clone jutsu) (Shocking touch) Electricity covers his hands and whatever he touch gets shocked.
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Ace Admin
Posts : 187 Join date : 2013-07-14 Age : 25 Location : Phoenix, Arizona
| Subject: Re: Kataro Hattori (Sorushi the seven tailed griffin) Tue Aug 06, 2013 6:23 pm | |
| Erup we redid the CS template. Your character needs to be revised accordingly. Other than that, the only problem is that your character can't start as anything above a Genin as a Jinchuuriki/Chikara. | |
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Ace Admin
Posts : 187 Join date : 2013-07-14 Age : 25 Location : Phoenix, Arizona
| Subject: Re: Kataro Hattori (Sorushi the seven tailed griffin) Tue Aug 06, 2013 6:34 pm | |
| Oh also, a flaming rasengan is a little much for a genin. You can have Kataro learn the jutsu later though. | |
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Erup41
Posts : 23 Join date : 2013-07-16
| Subject: Re: Kataro Hattori (Sorushi the seven tailed griffin) Sun Aug 18, 2013 7:23 am | |
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Ace Admin
Posts : 187 Join date : 2013-07-14 Age : 25 Location : Phoenix, Arizona
| Subject: Re: Kataro Hattori (Sorushi the seven tailed griffin) Sun Aug 25, 2013 11:03 am | |
| Okay, the character is fine, (save for the fact that it needs to be edited so it fits the new template) but without basic skills such as shadow clone and substitution, your character may find himself in tough situations that would prove otherwise easy tasks for other Genin. Just because your character has a really good offense, doesn't mean he'll win every fight. Defense is a very heavy aspect in Naruto and you may want to consider looking at the basics, since they are very useful, and... academy students have to use them during a test at the academy in order to become genin. I am not telling you that you have to add these, but if you don't you might find yourself getting screwed over a lot. | |
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Erup41
Posts : 23 Join date : 2013-07-16
| Subject: Re: Kataro Hattori (Sorushi the seven tailed griffin) Sun Aug 25, 2013 8:07 pm | |
| LOL. Sorry. I'll change it. | |
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Ace Admin
Posts : 187 Join date : 2013-07-14 Age : 25 Location : Phoenix, Arizona
| Subject: Re: Kataro Hattori (Sorushi the seven tailed griffin) Sun Aug 25, 2013 8:50 pm | |
| you have one too many jutsu | |
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Ace Admin
Posts : 187 Join date : 2013-07-14 Age : 25 Location : Phoenix, Arizona
| Subject: Re: Kataro Hattori (Sorushi the seven tailed griffin) Sun Aug 25, 2013 8:52 pm | |
| plus, he has no general appearance, and it's the village hidden in the clouds. There is no lightning village, just the land of lightning which is the overall country. | |
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Erup41
Posts : 23 Join date : 2013-07-16
| Subject: Re: Kataro Hattori (Sorushi the seven tailed griffin) Sun Aug 25, 2013 8:56 pm | |
| Sorry about that too. I forgot if it was the village hidden in the clouds or the village Hidden in the sky. Lol. I'll edit it tomorrow. I'm on mobile version so its a lot of work for me to keep on editing. | |
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Ace Admin
Posts : 187 Join date : 2013-07-14 Age : 25 Location : Phoenix, Arizona
| Subject: Re: Kataro Hattori (Sorushi the seven tailed griffin) Sun Aug 25, 2013 9:02 pm | |
| do you want me to do it? Just tell me which jutsu to take out. | |
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Erup41
Posts : 23 Join date : 2013-07-16
| Subject: Re: Kataro Hattori (Sorushi the seven tailed griffin) Sun Aug 25, 2013 9:08 pm | |
| You can take out 'flame spitter'. | |
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Ace Admin
Posts : 187 Join date : 2013-07-14 Age : 25 Location : Phoenix, Arizona
| Subject: Re: Kataro Hattori (Sorushi the seven tailed griffin) Sun Aug 25, 2013 9:14 pm | |
| Okay, you can use him, but I won't post approved until you give him an appearance. | |
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Erup41
Posts : 23 Join date : 2013-07-16
| Subject: Re: Kataro Hattori (Sorushi the seven tailed griffin) Sun Aug 25, 2013 9:20 pm | |
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Erup41
Posts : 23 Join date : 2013-07-16
| Subject: Re: Kataro Hattori (Sorushi the seven tailed griffin) Sun Aug 25, 2013 9:28 pm | |
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Ace Admin
Posts : 187 Join date : 2013-07-14 Age : 25 Location : Phoenix, Arizona
| Subject: Re: Kataro Hattori (Sorushi the seven tailed griffin) Sun Aug 25, 2013 9:29 pm | |
| Alright, still has history to add though. In his history, you should probably explain how an Uchiha managed to find his way all the way from the hidden leaf village to the land of lightning. | |
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Erup41
Posts : 23 Join date : 2013-07-16
| Subject: Re: Kataro Hattori (Sorushi the seven tailed griffin) Sun Aug 25, 2013 9:39 pm | |
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